IELTS Writing Chinese candidates common error analysis and recommendations 11

September 28, 2011
This article reproduced Xiamen Longre IELTS address: http://xiamen.ielts-lg.com/new.asp?id=66243 IELTS Writing is the most troublesome and most candidates difficult to obtain scores of subjects, though many candidates have done a lot of practice before the exam and simulation training, but the writing is still not obvious magnitude performance improvement. Xiamen Long House IELTS experts believe that the main causes of common training, not law, instructor quality, and weak language skills. According to the author many years of teaching experience in writing, on the candidates in writing mistake roughly summarized in the following ten areas:
1) inconsistencies (disagreements)
IELTS Writing the so-called inconsistent, not only refers to the Lord that is inconsistent, it also includes a number of inconsistencies, inconsistent tenses and pronouns inconsistent.
When one have money, he can do what he want to. (Once people have money, he will be able to do what)
analysis: One is the third person singular, and therefore the sentence should have read has; the same, want to be wants. This sentence is typical of the Lord that is inconsistent.
changed: Once one has money, he can do what he wants (to do).
2) modifiers dislocation (misplaced modifiers)
English and Chinese is different from the same sentence modifiers placed in a different location, may cause changes in the meaning of the sentence. For this many candidates had not attracted enough attention, resulting in unnecessary misunderstandings.
For example: I believe I can do it well and I will better know the world outside the campus.
Analysis: Better position properly, should be placed end of the sentence.
to: I believe I can do it well and I will know the world outside the campus better. in the spoken dialogue, people can make use of gestures, tone, context, so that incomplete sentences complete be understood. But written language is different, incomplete sentence structure makes the sentence incomprehensible. And this situation often occurs after the main sentence finished, the candidates want to add some additional instructions when:
There are many ways to know the society. For example, by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.
Analysis: The second half of the sentence “For example, by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.” is not a complete sentence, just some incoherent words, can not be a the sentence.
changed: There are many ways to know the society, for example, by TV, radio, newspaper.
4) dangling modifiers (dangling modifiers) modification of the so-called hanging means the beginning of the sentence phrases and logic behind the phrase is unclear
such as: At the age of ten, my grandfather died.
analysis: this sentence “At the age of ten “that only 10 years old, but did not indicate who was 10 years old, as a general inference can not be” my grandfather “, dangling modifiers, if we change this specific point, the sentence will not cause others to misunderstand the.
changed: When I was ten, my grandfather died.
To do well in college, good grades are essential.
analysis: sentence in the infinitive “To do well in college” logical subject is unclear.
to: To do well in college, a student needs good grades.
5) part of speech misuse (misuse of parts of speech) speech misuse manifests itself: preposition as a verb, adjective, adverb used as nouns as verbs with other
such as: None can negative the importance of money.
analysis: Negative is an adjective, mistaken for a verb to use.
to: None can deny the importance of money.
6) refers to is unclear (ambiguous reference of pronouns) mainly refers to the pronoun refers to is unclear and is alleged on behalf of the empowered to make the relationship is unclear, or the use of pronouns has inconsistent
1. Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to become her bridesmaid.
Analysis: Reading After the above words, the author can not clearly determine who will get married in two girls, who as maid of honor. If we take the easy misunderstanding of pronouns referring to well-targeted, meaning to clear out.
to: Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to become her bridesmaid.
2. We can also know the society by serving it yourself.
analysis: sentence and reflexive pronouns we refer to yourself inconsistent.
to: We can also know the society by serving it ourselves. 7) uninterrupted sentence (run-on sentences)
What is uninterrupted sentences, see below Examples:
There are many ways we get to know the outside world.
Analysis: This sentence contains a complete 2-layer mean “There are many ways” and ” we get to know the outside world “, simply put them together is not all right.
changed: There are many ways for us to get to know the outside world. or There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.
8 ) language problems (troubles in diction)
wording refers to a specific sentence in terms of how to properly use the issue, since many factors, such as class time is limited, the teacher guidance in this regard less, relatively speaking, leading the students in writing usually does not develop good scrutiny, as appropriate habits. They are often arbitrary, brought on by. Therefore, writing in the wrong place everywhere wording:
The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution. (Agriculture, increasing the use of chemicals also caused pollution)
Analysis: Clearly, the candidates to “obstacles” “obstacles” as a “material” to use, the other, “the increasing use” (increasing use) should be changed to “abusive use” (abuse).
to: The abusive use of chemical substance in agriculture also leads to pollution.
9) burden (redundancy)
Xiamen Longre IELTS Experts strongly recommend that candidates have a concise language in writing as you write a sentence without a superfluous word; write a paragraph no unnecessary sentences. Word of the phrase can not; can not clause or phrase of the sentence, such as:
In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.
Analysis : The sentence “In spite of the fact that he is lazy” is the appositive clause, in accordance with the above we can say the phrase without clause,
changed: In spite of his laziness , I like him.
For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the things they need.
analysis: the entire sentence is too wordy, can greatly simplify:
to: Diligent, caring people use money only to buy things they need.
10) incoherent (incoherence)
is not a coherent sentence incoherently, or structure is not clear, this is one of the common mistakes candidates. Such as:
The fresh water, it is the most important things in the world.
Analysis: “the fresh water” and a comma after it is not coherent, it and the things inconsistent in several aspects.
to: The fresh water is the most important thing in the world.
11) integrated language error (comprehensive misusage)
so-called comprehensive language error is in addition to the IELTS writing outside of the 10 kinds of errors such as tense, voice, punctuation, capitalization and other errors. Such as:
Today money to everyone is very importance, our cloths, live, eat, go etc.
Analysis: “our” is the possessive form of pronouns can be alone as an adjective to use, no need to use the form, and should be followed with the term.
changed: Today money to everyone is very important, for example, our eating, clothing, living, going, etc.
understanding of the common error, Xiamen Long Court IELTS experts will take you through a few candidates Yasi Fan Man, to understand the frequency of occurrence of these errors and improve these errors will bring about a qualitative change in the article:
Example One: Writing task 1 (Cambridge 1 – page 51):
The diagram shows the process of collecting information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts in Australia Bureau of Meteorology. It can be clearly seen that information goes through three main stages until it can be broadcast. These stages are incoming information, analysis and forecasting, preparing the broadcast and finally, broadcast. As it is shown in the diagram, first, information is gathered via satellite, radar, and drifting buoy. The information from satellite is transmitted to radar. Satellite, itself, takes photos. All the information provided by these three tools are integrated into satellite photos, radar screen, and synoptic charts. Then, they are analyzed and forecast. This information is sent to computers in order to prepare the broadcast. Finally, up-to-date information is broadcast via TV, radio, and recorded announcement. In conclusion, the diagram shows that there are various stages in preparing and broadcast of latest news on the weather and that radar has a fundamental role in gathering data. Also, the most comprehensive information is obtained from synoptic charts.
Example Two: Writing task 2
Smoking tobacco should be made illegal like other dangerous drugs. Agree or disagree? In the world today where stresses and tensions are at high degree, some people appeal to smoke cigarettes. They think that by means of cigar they can relax themselves, while it is obviously shown how harmful tobacco smoking is and it is clear why it should be banned in public. Smoking, at a glance, has many noxious effects on body. Some harmful aspects are proved and shown on body, on economy, and on the air. Taking body into account, tobacco smoking has so many hazardous effects. WHO reports that 85 per cent of lung cancers are caused by cigarette smoking. On the other hand, recent research studies show that low birth weight is more common among the children of smoker mothers. Another effect of tobacco on the body is its risk for heart diseases. Smoking is the major cause of heart attacks. These examples simply show the perils of tobacco smoking to the body. Furthermore, cigarette trading these days has become a lucrative business around the world, especially within developed countries. This subject leads to extraction of millions of dollars from developing countries in order to import cigars. This currency that is spent on smoking perilous substances, can be specified for education, health, and infrastructures. In addition, smoking affects the economy of families. The money that can be used for promotion of life is used for decreasing life span. From the air point of view, smoking cigarettes has dramatic effects on air. In rapidly increasing air pollution of metropolitan areas, smoking makes the situation even worse. Scientists report that one of the major pollutants in big cities is cigarette smoke. Furthermore, every day we see a lot of fags on the streets or in the nature that make their scenes indecent. No wonder, tobacco smoking is risky from several points of view and making it illegal may help to decline its adverse effects. People should find better ways to relax themselves, like exercise or reading.
Example Three: Task 2: Shopping has become a favorite pastime among young people. Why do you think it is like that, and do you think they must be encouraged to do other things rather than shopping? Shopping is going to be a habit or a bad attitude among our new generation for some reasons such as careless parents, bombardment by advertisements and bad behavior. of consumption societies. Society should exercise more control over the young people interests and requirements. Not surprisingly, we have been faced with the fact that our new generation is crazy about shopping. Firstly, they are easily influenced by advertising around them. Whenever we switch on our TV we will be bombarded with lots of TV commercials; whenever we surface the Internet, we come across lots of advertisements. Also, on the other media we face lots of publicity; newspapers, magazines and radio or billboards are the best examples. All the time we unwished confront by these new ads. Young people will be easily affected, and would like to try the new material, feel the new taste and have new experience. They easily reply to advertising because it is part of their nature, and it is normal. In addition, there are parents who are careless about their children behavior. Some parents have to work from day to night; they just pay for children and give them pocket money as much as they need. Furthermore; we live in a society which forces people to consume different new things and materials, because of its policy. In this case, young people are not sinners. Therefore, the government should exercise more control over the advertising. Also, the government should teach people, especially young generation , to take more responsibility to produce as well as consume. The government should encourage the young generation to take advantages of education and production; moreover, the government should pave the way for better situation for future. In conclusion, young people are easily affected by advertising; in this matter parents and the government are responsible. Both parents and the government should be aware of further problems.
Example Four: Sample task
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
You should write at least 150 words. Rates of smoking in Someland – men and women The graph compares the attitude to smoking in men and women in Someland during 1960-2000. It also indicates the difference in smoking habits between two sexes (genders) has reduced over time. At the beginning of the study in 1960 the number of men who smoked was
greater than that of women; it means that 600 per 1000 people who smoked were men and just fewer than 100 were women. Gradually, the number of female smokers rose to 300 per 1000 until 1975 and afterwards it reached a plateau with only a shallow descending slip down to 2000 when the number of female smokers was only 200 per 1000 smokers. On the other hand, during this period the number of male smokers slopes down in a steady manner from 600 per 1000 in 1960 to 210 to 2000 per 1000 for male smokers. In short, it is obvious that at first there was less tendent to smoke among women and there was an upward trend in their tendency. However, in 1975 the trend changed and two genders kept quitting smoking, and in 2000 the number of male and female smokers became equal with just a little more men smoking than women as before. Example Five: Dear Sir / Madam,
I would like to inform. you that there is something wrong with the camera I purchased from your shop through my journey to your town last month, and I am writing to you to make a complaint.
Last month the day after purchasing the camera, I put a roll of 24-exposure film into the camera. I took most photos during the journey. Yesterday after having the photos developed, I found some white spots covered on the surface of all photos. A specialist told me that it is because of a defect in camera. My wife and I regret for memorable pictures we could have.
There is a warranty card in the camera package, which has the reference number “900123″ on it as the code. Please notify me whether I should send it to you or to the producer company for warranty service. Therefore, I believe I should somehow be compensated because I have lost so many valuable moments.
I wait for a refund of $ 300 that I paid for the camera, besides a roll of film.
Yours faithfully, S. Sajadian